Tag: proof of concept

  • Proof of Concept: Fight Scene using My Novel’s Magic System
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    Proof of Concept: Fight Scene using My Novel’s Magic System

                Räth’s heart pounded in her throat, her hands tense around her polearm; she felt the alo flow through the weapon and herself, a cold sensation throughout her whole body. Mundo stood opposite her, a large Athipa fighter, a two-handed axe at his side, she could feel the cold alo oozing of it.

                He took a step forward, tendrils of alo from his feet writhing its way into the ground, he planted his leg and the ground beneath it burst up, hurtling him towards Räth, axe primed for her throat. Räth inhaled sharply, gathering herself just before he struck, she ducked under, front leg stretched out, she thrust her spear up, hoping to skewer him but it bounced off his black exoskeleton, scratching it slightly.

                Mundo landed on the other side, catching himself with the 6 legs at his back, springing off them and bringing the axe over his head, and pouncing on Räth. She didn’t have time to move. The spear in her hand burst inro array of cyan strings, she raised her arm to block the axe, trying to form a shield in front of her moments before impact. The axe struck the half-formed armour, breaking it immediately into another burst of string, throwing her. She rolled on her back, and caught herself with her hoofs, but Mundo was already at her again.

                She rolled out of the way and got to her feet again, running around him in circles, her legs propelling her faster and faster until Mundo couldn’t track her with any of his four eyes. Just then she b-lined towards him, a short dagger forming in her hands, he turned to face her, but she was faster. She jumped on him, running the blade through the gap between his plates and into his neck. There was a moment of stillness, Mundo tried to throw Räth off with one hand, but he was too weak, and it felt more like a gentle push. The axe in his hand fell, slowly dissipating into strings on the ground. Mundo fell to his knees, shaking the ground as he did, and knocking Räth off beside him and onto her back. He fell forward onto the ground, and Räth was left alone. She took a deep breath, blowing out a sizable gust of wind to empty the alo in her bloodstream, and then exhaustion struck, she felt her eyelids close, and all was quiet.


    Author’s Note:

    I didn’t mean to post this when I was writing it but I thought it would be interesting to put up, and see what the masses think! I don’t explain much of what is happening in this fight in relation to the system, but I quite liked the flow and momentum of this piece which I hope you will to! Räth is my MC, and Mundo is a punching bag I made for this fight. Let me know what you think in the comments! I might post excerpts as I actually get to working more on my novel, but I’m always afraid things will get stolen… so we’ll see. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed reading it!

Saye Kamal